I float, but a whisper of my former self. Before was such solid,
corporeal being. Now I fade, sweeping back, forth.
Sometimes I see you as you wish to see me;
but each time, I dim further…
Category: microstory, yeah write
Painful and beautiful at the same time. I love the shape of this, Arden.
Thank you Christine!
This is utterly haunting and I love the way you’ve formatted it to look like it’s disappearing….vanishing, slowly…brilliant!!
Thank you so much!
Agreed on the visual shape ^^ So effective in reflecting the (poignant) sense. Love this line: “Now I fade, sweeping back, forth.”
Thank you Jennifer! I love playing with the shape of 42 words 🙂
A haunting glimpse into the beyond. I really like this one. Loved the design of your post too…very cool.
I have to echo what everyone else has said – the shape portrays the vanishing so effectively!
Thank you! 🙂
If I had to explain it in scientific terms (same as what others have said) – your poem ends into a singularity 🙂 Beautiful indeed!
Thank you very much!
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