Is it secrets you
tell, to try and dull my shine?
to build your own worth?
When you open your mouth to
whisper these lies, do
I enter your mind?
Or have I turned to dust by
your devilish tongue…
Category: microstory, yeah write
Beautiful. Really enjoyed this.
Thank you so much! 🙂
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I never quite got the point of haiku, but this was good.
Thank you! I’m not sure I followed all the rules but I like it so who cares! Haha
Good job with the prompt
Thank you Ruby!
Dulling the shine is a powerful image.
Thanks Cyn! 🙂
A lot of truth to this one. Always wonder if people’s ears are burning when folks gossip about them.
Haha. Everytime my ears get hot, i wonder! 🙂
Well, your 3 syllabic units (5,7,5) are not what we call stand alone “Haiku”, but what you have done, here, to develop your microstory works and gives it some poetic syllabic shape and form, irregardless…so…as you say, “who cares?” Whatever works and this works. Plus, the cleverness of your piece lies in finding something that burns and is not subject to the usual ‘love’ theme but rather something that is happening to our ears, lol. Nice work!
Thank you! I figured I was bending some rules (I’m very new to poetry) which is why I didn’t tag it as a haiku trio but I liked playing around with it. Thanks so much for stopping by!
The great thing about poetry is that you don’t always have to follow the rules. Your words flow, and actually I think it is brilliant.
Thank you so much Tina! I really appreciate that. 🙂
I like the confrontation in this. I’m never gonna talk smack about you again, Arden.
Hooray!!! ….. wait. AGAIN? 🙂
With gossip mongers having a field day at work today for some reason, I can relate to this so much .,.
Very well written … 🙂
Oh no! Well thank you very much 🙂
Great play around the face! Love the title, too.
Enjoyed! Good luck on #195.
Thank you! Same to you!
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