He watched the three brothers from the shadows as they walked home. The two eldest boys ran around the youngest. They always called him the ‘baby’, poking and prodding him until tears overflowed onto his cheeks.
“I hate being the baby,” the boy screamed as his brothers ran away laughing.
He smiled as he watched. The boy had no idea the destiny that awaited him. He would soon be the savior of their world, the one chosen to lead the war against the darkness. His brothers would soon bow down to him. He would never again be the baby.
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31 thoughts on “Savior”
Good stuff. Unfortunately, you know what I’m going to say… what happens next?!?! 😉
Haha! I know 🙂 If I ever get in the mood to write a ton of books, I’ve got plenty of material to choose from!
Have you finished the layout for your NaNo project?
I have 🙂 I kind of wish I hadn’t though. Now, I’m anxious to start. I’m trying to bide my time with more research.
Hahaha… only a couple weeks away, just put it aside and give me what happens next in this story!! 😉
I haven’t started my layout yet… I may not do one. Just start typing and see what happens. That worked out okay for me last year… but, we’ll see. I think this year’s story is going to be harder to write and a layout might come in handy.
I applaud you if you do 🙂 I would be lost without one!
Lost? No. Taking a more meandering path? Perhaps. 😀
oh the retribution, the joy of turning the story around.
Nice write, good words.
Thank you! 🙂
This kind of reminds me of Joseph…how his brothers sold him into slavery to get rid of him, but years later, needed his help.
Thanks for reading!
Ooo, intriguing. Like Janna, I thought of Joseph as well. If you don’t mind a tiny bit of concrit, I’d say that I got a little confused by the pronouns – it took a couple of tries to parse out which “he” was which. Then again, this is often a problem in such short pieces, when we don’t have the wordspace to introduce characters properly…
I actually thought the same thing! I should have given a name to the watcher. Thanks for sharing!
I love the smug power of the “baby”.
Thanks for reading!
Ooh! I like the build up. I’m intrigued!
Thanks for reading!!
Like almost all people, everyone has their day, sooner or later. Being patient often brings about its’ own rewards, as “Baby” will, eventually, find out. Lots o’ story in those 99 words, dear!
Thank you so much!
packed with impact!
yeah I voted for you! I love a little cruelty and I love the name dancing wino a little more. It’s only under a sufficient amount of booze and sabbath I can see this story coming alive. But, when it does come alive…it shines! Splendid.
Haha. Best comment! 🙂 Thanks so much!
The meek shall inherit the earth, right? Thanks for being a part of our big 99th!
Thanks! Love Trifecta! 🙂
What a cool read, and I’m sorry if I’m too dense to know this with certitude, but was he “him?”
Dangit! Stupid pronouns 🙂 Sorry for the confusion! There is the watcher and the boy (savior).
No, no – you’re writing was spot-on, dear! I was just wondering if the watcher actually was the savior, gone back to his own past for whatever reason. Sorry for overthinking it.
Haha! That’s an awesome theory! I love these shorties. Y’all take the story in so many different directions!! 🙂
Who you callin’ short?