She sits in her car, staring at the one place she wishes she didn’t have to go. Over a single weekend, her whole life has changed. She can feel the glares of the students as they walk towards the school. She thinks of ditching but it will only make matters worse.
What hurts the most is that she still cares for him, even after everything he has done. By now, the picture has made its way through the entire school. She wouldn’t be surprised if some of the teachers had seen it. She had trusted him entirely and he had just shoved it right back in her face.
She takes a deep breath, it catching in her chest with a fiery pain. She looks down, expecting to see the brand across her chest. Slut.
“I can do this,” she whispers to the empty space around her.
She gets out of the car and moves towards the school. She keeps her head down, avoiding the stares at all costs. The whispers enter her mind, bringing tears to her eyes.
I can’t believe she showed up.
I’d never show my face again if it were me.
Her life is so over.
She shoves her way through the front entrance and runs to the nearest bathroom, barely making it before the sobs explode from inside her. All the thoughts she had been trying to suppress over the past two days come bleeding out of her.
A scream boils up her throat but she pushes it down along with the menacing suicidal thoughts that have plagued her since it happened.
They won’t win.
As she makes her way out of the bathroom, she holds her head high, willing to face the masses. When she opens her locker, a waterfall of paper comes crashing upon her. She picks up a piece from the floor but she already knows.
Instead of crying, she walks on to class.
I won’t pay for this.
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a mark made by burning with a hot iron to attest manufacture or quality or to designate ownership;
a printed mark made for similar purposes : trademark;
a mark put on criminals with a hot iron;
a mark of disgrace : stigma <the brand of poverty>
46 thoughts on “Betrayal Breeds Revenge”
Wow, I love this.
Thanks 🙂 I feel I should write a follow-up but can’t decide. I kind of like just ending it here!
I actually like the non-official ending in this one.
I need an ending…..have to have an ending…..please!! pretty please…. 🙂
Haha — We’ll see 🙂
Actually, I would rather not have an ending. I can create my own, wildly varying, possibilities.
I think you’re right 🙂 I’m just going to leave it be!
You are very good at this fiction thing, Arden.
Thank you! I’m enjoying it 🙂
I really loved it… But it has me confused. I want to hear more, but I’ve always been a fan of abrupt endings. Well either way, this is brilliant 😀
Thanks! There may be a second part. I haven’t decided yet 🙂
Haven’t decided yet?: Of course there must be a second part!!! There must, there must. I’ve made an official kingdom decree. 😉
Haha. Alright. I’ll think about it 🙂
ohhh hello, carrie!! go get em!
Hah! When I finished it, that’s exactly what I thought of!
Uh-oh, this doesn’t sound good (for everyone else that is!) You did a great job conveying her shame and raw emotions.
Thank you! There may be a second part. I haven’t decided yet!
Oh that is really interesting. You carved her emotions so well in her words. But you kept it all hidden; only giving a glimpse or two in a while throughout the tale. I liked the use of word brand and I guess it is a perfect ending.
Thank you very much!
i’m so glad she held her head up high at the end!
Me too! Thanks for reading 🙂
Oh, snap! Somebody’s gonna get it!
I like how you take us through her despair to her growing anger. I would love to see a Part II. 🙂
Thanks! A couple of people have said the same so I’ll see what I can do 🙂
Powerful, and unfortunately, too common now. I fear these types of things with my daughter.
I think that’s a common fear but one a family can get through if they stick together.
This was good, really good.
Thank you so much!
You have captured the characters emotions perfectly. I feel the full scope as she chooses how to deal with her circumstances. I’m especially happy that she is strong enough to fight the negative and move on to a strong choice. Love this story. A lot.
Wow. Thank you so much!
Very well done!
I’m a fan of stories that end without really ending, allowing the reader to sort of create their own, or leave lingering questions.
This very much reminds me of a recent news story about a young woman who committed suicide after intense bullying following an unfortunate incident. Very powerful piece.
Thanks! I enjoy those endings as well. Unfortunately, that story is far too common nowadays! Thank you for stopping by and reading!
The way her internal monologue enters the story like dialogue from other characters was a cool touch – and the kind of modern, high school nod to the Scarlet Letter. Nice one
Thanks so much!
Nice work in voicing her thoughts, and conveying how cruel kids can be. Happens too often, both the trust of sending the photo and the judgment. Good one.
Thank you so much!
The underlying story you keep mostly hidden away makes this even more intriguing.
Her determination is to be admired. I just hope she doesn’t do anything that will worsen her situation.
Thank you for linking up!
Very cool. I like this character already from just that short excerpt. Don’t really have a critique. Just want to know why, how and what next! That’s really cool.
Awesome! Thank you so much!
Wonderful and now I am intrigued and think about what will happen next.